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Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/she would like your advice about finding a place to live. Write an email to ypur friend. İn your email 1: Describe where you live when you were a student at the university 2: Recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation 3: warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation

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Dear friend,
first
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 of all, I would like to
congratulations
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to
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you. I am so happy for you. My friend, I want to talk about my university. My university is one the best
universitiy
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university
universities
 in the country and world as well. There is a good education and good teachers.
Morever
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Moreover
, İt was located in the middle of the city.
That is
 why, when you go outside, you can go
to
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everywhere
by
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on
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walk
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a walk
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. At the same
time
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 everything is
centrilized
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centralized
centralised
thus
, there is no need to use lots of public transport
vehicle
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vehicles
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. By the way, there are many
students
 in the city for
this
reasons
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reason
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 there are many
accommodation
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accommodations
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 for
students
such
 as
dorm
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dorms
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, family
house
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houses
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 and
rent
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rented
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house
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houses
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. When you come in here, I am sure you will not
any
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have any
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 problem dealing with
this
situtation
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situation
. I would like to give information about
this
 issue.
İt
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The
 was
first
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 time when ı came in here, I stayed at the
students
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student's
students'
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dorm
. I was sharing my
room
 with 4
students
.
Actually
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 I did not relax.
Because
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for example
 ı wanted to sleep early and turn off the light but other
students
 did not.There was a private
room
 in the
dorm
 but they were so expensive and I could not afford
its
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it
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.
Therefore
, I left from
dorm
 and settled
to
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in
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family
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the family
a family
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house
. Now I am very happy so There
is
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are
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 no
another
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other
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students
 except for me. I have
private
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a private
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room
. I can sleep whenever ı want and turn on light and off.
As well as
 its price is suitable for me. My friend, when you come
in
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here, you should be
carefull
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careful
especially
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,especially
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 relevant accommodation. Because İf you do not rest enough, you may feel tired
along
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throughout
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 the day and you can not take efficient from school.
İf
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If
 you want to stay
dorm
, ı think you should choose
private
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a private
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room
 at the
dorm
 if you have enough budget. You should stay away from with many
students
room
. İf you will choose
family
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a family
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house
 like me, you should stay away again, if there are many
students
 there, it is generally
caos
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cold
 there.
To sum up
, my school and my city are very nice. There are a
little
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bit
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few
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problem
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problems
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 here but these are very normal. Do not forget I am here and I am ready
for
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to
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 help you
every
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with every
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 topic.
That is
 why you can feel yourself very
relax
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. Take care see you soon. Best Lucky
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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