Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/she would like your advice about finding a place to live. Write an email to ypur friend. İn your email 1: Describe where you live when you were a student at the university 2: Recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation 3: warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation

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Dear friend,

first

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of all, I would like to

congratulations

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you. I am so happy for you. My friend, I want to talk about my university. My university is one the best

universitiy

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university

universities

in the country and world as well. There is a good education and good teachers.

Morever

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, İt was located in the middle of the city.

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why, when you go outside, you can go

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everywhere

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walk

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. At the same

time

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everything is

centrilized

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centralized

centralised

thus

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, there is no need to use lots of public transport

vehicle

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. By the way, there are many

students

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in the city for

this

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reasons

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there are many

accommodation

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for

students

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such

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dorm

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dorms

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, family

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house

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houses

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and

rent

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house

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houses

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. When you come in here, I am sure you will not

any

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problem dealing with

this

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situtation

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situation

. I would like to give information about

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issue.

İt

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was

first

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time when ı came in here, I stayed at the

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students

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dorm

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. I was sharing my

room

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with 4

students

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I did not relax.

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for example

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ı wanted to sleep early and turn off the light but other

students

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did not.There was a private

room

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in the

dorm

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but they were so expensive and I could not afford

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, I left from

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and settled

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family

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house

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. Now I am very happy so There

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another

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students

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except for me. I have

private

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room

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. I can sleep whenever ı want and turn on light and off.

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its price is suitable for me. My friend, when you come

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here, you should be

carefull

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careful

especially

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relevant accommodation. Because İf you do not rest enough, you may feel tired

along

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the day and you can not take efficient from school.

İf

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you want to stay

dorm

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, ı think you should choose

private

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a private

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room

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at the

dorm

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if you have enough budget. You should stay away from with many

students

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room

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. İf you will choose

family

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a family

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house

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like me, you should stay away again, if there are many

students

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there, it is generally

caos

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cold

there.

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, my school and my city are very nice. There are a

little

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bit

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problem

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here but these are very normal. Do not forget I am here and I am ready

for

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help you

every

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topic.

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why you can feel yourself very

relax

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. Take care see you soon. Best Lucky

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

402 words

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