Improvements in health, education, and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I strongly agree
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rich
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should help poor
nation
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is
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in
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the development process because it is
an
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responsibility of
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those
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nation
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nations
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who are developed.
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in lifestyle, knowledge,
food
and
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transportation
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very important for
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country
so government should first focus on that things
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to other things.
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, if the health of the state
will be
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good
than
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can focus on school
education
as well as
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work for more hours
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which
improve
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the living standard of the population. If
facilities
like
food
will improve
than
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the health and age of the people will
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automatic
incerase
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increase
by which
country
can easily and can grow fast.
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is the key factor in the growth of the
country
.
However
, rich countries should
also
support
to
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poor countries by
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things like
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,
food
, books, knowledge and transportation
facilities
. For
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instant, if a
country
like the USA
help
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a poor
contry
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country
like Nepal by giving
education
then
it becomes easy for
nepal
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to develop like another
countrycountry
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country country
. On the other side
country
which are growing fast
its there
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responsibility to help poor
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countries
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and provide the
facilities
which
there
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are
in
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needed. Rich
country
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countries
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can help poor
country
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countries
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in
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schooling
facilities
and
food
facilities
. Rich
country
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countries
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can use
good
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goods
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which are made in poor
country
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countries
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which can help poor
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countries
to grow even should help in
another ways
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too.
To conclude
, the above information
describe
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about
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the
the
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benefits
about
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if
rich
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a rich
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country
will help
poor
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the poor
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country
as well as
by
imporoving
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improving
health,
education
and trade
than
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then
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it can easily develop.
Hence
,
this
is the
responisbity
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responsibility
of the rich
country
to help the poor
country
.
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  • underdeveloped nations
  • economic disparity
  • global cooperation
  • moral obligation
  • historical exploitation
  • interconnected world
  • economic stability
  • quality of life
  • trade relationships
  • humanitarian aid
  • capacity building
  • dependency syndrome
  • sustainable development
  • bilateral agreements
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