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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts illustrate the proportions of three types of
nutrients
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 which are
sodium
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, saturated fat and added
sugar
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 in daily
meals
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 in the United States of America. It should be considered that eating too much of these
nutrients
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 can be harmful to our health condition. As an overview, both
sodium
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 and saturated fat are their most popularities for
consumption
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 at dinner.
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, adding
sugar
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 is more consumed for snacks among other types of
meals
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. The lowest rate of usage of all the given categories belongs to the breakfasts. As it can be observed,
however
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 the highest percentage of
consumption
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 of
sodium
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 and saturated fat belongs to dinner
meals
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 with 43% and 37% respectively,
this
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 meal only contains 23% of the added
sugar
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consumption
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population
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. For
this
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 specific ingredient which is added
sugar
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, the highest proportion of usage belongs to snacks with 42% of the consumer
population
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.
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,
this
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 mentioned part of daily meal has the third rank of
consumption
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population
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 in two other described
nutrients
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. On the one hand, in spite of being the second rank of consuming
population
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 for both
sodium
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 and saturated fat, lunch has the third rank in using added
sugar
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 among other
meals
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.
On the other hand
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, the meal that uses all of these
nutrients
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 least among others is breakfast with 14%, 16% and 16% for
sodium
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, saturated fat and added
sugar
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 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nutrients, sodium, sugar, meals, consumption, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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