Improvements in health, education, and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Development and statistics of a nation strongly
depends
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on
country's
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the country's
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wellbeing
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well-being
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, education and economy. Some masses believe that more developed
countries
should help poor
countries
for all these terms. In
this
essay, we will discuss both views,
however
, I strongly agree with the statement.
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with, bonding or a good relationship
of
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two nations plays a significant role
to raise
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economy
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the economy
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. Helping
under- developed
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underdeveloped
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countries
by providing some funding for their hospitals,
education
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and education
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services will build a strong
relation
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between both
the
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nation
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nations
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.
Moreover
, it will increase
import
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and export business between
two
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.
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,
USA
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the USA
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provides military facilities to
countries
like
india
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India
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, sri
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and Sri
lanka
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;
same
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as India provides produce, grains,
rice
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and rice
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to
USA
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the USA
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.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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