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The line graph illustrates the average number of UK worker traveling by three different transport from 1970 to 2030.

The line graph illustrates the average number of UK worker traveling by three different transport from 1970 to 2030.
The line graph illustrates the average
number
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 of
UK
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commuters
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 travelling each day by three different
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modes
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mode
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modes
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 of transport from 1970
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to 2023
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2023
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.
Overall
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,
Car
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 were by far the most used mode of transport for a 60-year period, whilst Bus
users
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 started to decline and Train
users
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 increased rapidly in the
UK
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. In the year 1970, the
number
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 of Car
commuters
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were
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 about 5
million
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 and
this
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 figure rapidly increased
about
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 7
million
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 in the year 2000. From 2000 to 2030 the
number
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 of Car
users
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 in the
UK
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 steadily increased
about
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by about
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 9
million
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.
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, the
number
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 of Train
commuters
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were
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 2
million
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 in the year 1970,
this
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 figure slowly went up
about
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to about
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 3
million
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 and remained constant for
10-year
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a 10-year
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 period. In 2010 figures for Train
users
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 took a massive jump to about 4
million
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.
On the other hand
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, Bus
commuters
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 in the
UK
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 were about 5
million
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, which dramatically declined below 3
million
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 in 2030.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, uk, commuters, users, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrates
  • average number
  • traveling
  • transportation
  • period
  • analyzed
  • trends
  • significant
  • increases
  • decreases
  • peaked
  • examination
  • growth
  • decline
  • factors
  • contributed
  • noticeable
  • increase
  • decrease
  • speculating
  • comparison
  • popularity
  • usage
  • shifts
  • preference
  • speculation
  • future trends
  • environmental concerns
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • conclusion
  • summarizing
  • findings
  • preferences
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