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The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar charts depict the proportion data of
computer
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ownership
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as well as
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 the percentage of
computer
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ownership
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 categorized by
education
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 level from 2002 to 2010.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen there was a growth both in
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 percentage of the population in general of those who owned a
computer
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, and the number of
computer
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ownership
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 among all
education
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 levels over eight
years
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. At the beginning of the year, the population of
computer
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ownership
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 started at 58% before facing a constant rise to 60% after four
years
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.
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, in the next four
years
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, it increased gradually to almost 80%.
According to
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 the level of
education
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, In 2002, the
ownership
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 of computers was dominated by Bachelor’s Degree, and Postgraduate Qualifications at 70%, and 80%, respectively. Those
education
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 levels still remained a big contributor in the next eight
years
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 and experienced an increase of 20%.
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, the other contributors followed by college students at 55% in 2002 and ascended to 80% in 2010.
Furthermore
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, in 2002, high school graduates contributed at 30% before experiencing a growth to 65% in 2010
In contrast
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, no high school diploma proportion from 2002 to 2010 still remained at below 50%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, ownership, education, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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