The pie chart show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all source and renewbles in the year 2009.

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electricity generation in the

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2009. In all types, Conventional thermal is 59.6%, Nuclear is 23% and Renewables is 17.4%.

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2009, in all types nuclear is 76%a

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2009 is nuclear and hydroelectric.

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electricity

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