The pie chart show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all source and renewbles in the year 2009.

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renewables

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2009. The below information

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nations.

Germany

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electricity generation in the

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2009. In all types, Conventional thermal is 59.6%, Nuclear is 23% and Renewables is 17.4%.

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biomass

39.3%,

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is 36.9%, solar is 6.1%, and

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hydroelectric

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2009, in all types nuclear is 76%a

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converntional

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thermal

is only 10.3%. But in Renewables highest is hydroelectric with 80.5%, biomass is 8.1%,

wind

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is 10.5% and solar is 0.9% and

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growth

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2009 is nuclear and hydroelectric.

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. The above information

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about the

electicity

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electricity

generated by two countries in the

year

2009.

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The pie chart show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all source and renewbles in the year 2009.

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many people leave their home country and go to other countries to live and work.why do you think it is happening?do the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantage.

Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many countries thought that children have to do homework in their free time while others say children should do more outdoor activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people nowadays change career more frequently than ever before while others stick to a single job. What are the advantages and disadvantages of changing career?