The pie chart show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all source and renewbles in the year 2009.

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2009. In all types, Conventional thermal is 59.6%, Nuclear is 23% and Renewables is 17.4%.

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The pie chart show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all source and renewbles in the year 2009.

An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping on line.

Some people think that using mobile phones and computers has a negative effect on young people's reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

More and more people today expect to get what they want instantly ( goods, services, news), without having to wait. Why is this? Do you think these expectations to get things instantly is a positive or negative development?

Environmental problems are too big for individual countries and individual persons to address. In other words, we have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is at an international level. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?