Women can do everything that men can and they even do it better. They also can do many things that men cannot. But it is a fact that their work is not appreciated as much as men's, although they have to sacrififice a lot for their family and career. It is said: "A woman's place is in the home." What do you think?

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Nowadays, both genders are equal in our society. Some people say that
women
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can do lots of tasks which
men
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can and even some things that
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cannot.
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, they say that
women
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may have much more difficulties
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doing
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kind of
activities
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than
men
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. So they think that
women
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need to be a housewife only. In
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essay, I will give my own opinion about
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statement and try to prove my answer. On the one hand,
women
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are becoming stronger and trying some activities which
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do,
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playing games which only man was playing (football, box and others), working on the construction of some buildings and so on. Some of them are doing it better than man even.
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, they have a chance to do what they want, because our government
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.
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, there are some professions that are not suitable for girls.
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, girls by beating each other may lose their beauty.
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,
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organism
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us weaker than male's. For that reason may sacrifice by lifting some heavy things. In conclusion, I think that
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it has pros to some
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it consists more cons because of some reasons about female health.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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