Machine- made products have now replaced many hand- made products. Do you think the merits of this development outweigh its demerits? Why?

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Technology
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nowadays has a great impact on our lives and the
products
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we have been using
in
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on
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daily
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a daily
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basis. It has been argued
if
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that
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the advantages of
technology
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surpasses
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it's
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their
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disadvantages to
human kind
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humankind
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. I believe that with the new generation we have now,
technology
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shall have more benefits than
it's
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its
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downside
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especially
applied
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when applied
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to every
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products
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used.
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with, when buying
products
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,
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people
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preferences for quality
matters
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matter
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the most. As with the new
technology
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is
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in the market, many machine-made
products
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were introduced and
was
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were
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greatly utilized mostly since it is more convenient and efficient.
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, most fast foods are machine-made. They are easy to cook and affordable too. Most
people
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choose
these kind
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this kind
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of foods to save time and energy
instead
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of cooking
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home made
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homemade
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foods after work. On ,the other hand, hand-made
products
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such
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as
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home cooked
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home-cooked
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meals are still the healthiest way to eat. Nothing beats eating at
home
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at
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in
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your own comfort.
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,
this
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also
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offers a great bond and time for
family
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the family
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to share meals together and
maintaining
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harmony in the house.
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,
instead
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of eating at
expensive
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restaurant ,family can have a simple dinner at
home
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where everyone can participate in preparing the meal and
enjoying
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at their own family table privately.
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, I believe that
technology
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helps us a lot to make our life easier and everything is possible and feasible with
technology
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.
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, the facts how
technology
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is an ally to us,
,
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it should be utilized properly.
Technology
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is for the
people
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and
people
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should be the
one
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ones
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controlling and handling it not the other way around.
Technology
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offer
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a bunch of benefits as long as we humans know how to handle it appropriately
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