The pie chart show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all source and renewbles in the year 2009.

The pie chart show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all source and renewbles in the year 2009.
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The pie charts illustrate the information about
electricity
production
by using varied kinds of sources and exhaustible
resources
in
Germany
and
France
in 2009.
Overall
, in
Germany
, the major contributor was conventional thermal for
electricity
generation,
whereas
in
France
was nuclear.
Furthermore
, when it comes to renewable
resources
, the main resource was biomass in
Germany
,
conversely
hydroelectric in
France
.
To begin
with,
Germany
and
France
used conventional thermal, nuclear and renewable
resources
for their
electricity
production
. In
Germany
, approximately 60% of conventional thermal was used,
whereas
nearly 10% was used in
France
. When it comes to exhaustible
resources
,
Germany
used nearly 30% of biomass
power
whereas
,
in contrast
, about 80% of hydroelectricity was used in
France
. Sola
power
was the least amount of usage in terms of
electricity
production
in
Germany
, which contributed 6.1%.
Moreover
, when it comes to the
electricity
production
of
France
, 10.5% of wind
power
was contributed.
However
, in
Germany
, a quarter of wind
power
was used in terms of
electricity
generation. Notably, neither of the countries used geothermal as an
electricity
production
resource in 2009.
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