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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant
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The two bar graphs illustrate information about the
number
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 of postgraduates and
graduate
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students
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 who opted for their career pathways in the
UK
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 in 2008.
Overall
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, the highest
number
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 of both
graduate
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 and undergraduate
students
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 have chosen
further
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 studies,
whereas
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 the least
number
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 of them opted for voluntary
work
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.
Furthermore
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, undergraduates and
graduates
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 have shown nearly the same figures for part-time
work
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 and unemployment. Turning to the destination of the
UK
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graduates
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, approximately 30,000
graduates
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 obtained their higher studies. Nearly 18,000
graduate
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students
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 got permanent jobs,
whereas
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,
in contrast
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, about 16,000
graduates
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 did not have any jobs.
Moreover
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, only 3500
graduate
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students
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 have chosen voluntary
work
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. Regarding postgraduate
students
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 in the
UK
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, as is seen in the given graph, nearly 3000 of them have done
further
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 studies.
However
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, approximately the same
number
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 of postgraduate
students
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 obtained full-time job opportunities.
Furthermore
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,1625 postgraduate
students
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 did not have any kind of career in 2008. But 345
students
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work
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 as volunteers.
Conversely
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, it is witnessed that selecting voluntary
work
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 was not popular among postgraduate and undergraduate
students
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 in the
UK
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 in 2008.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, furthermore, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, graduate, students, uk, work, graduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • full-time work
  • graduate
  • postgraduate
  • trends
  • part-time work
  • further study
  • gap year
  • traveling
  • unemployment
  • percentages
  • proportion
  • significant differences
  • subsequent activities
  • career progression
  • academic advancement
  • job market
  • vocational training
  • data interpretation
  • employment sector
  • career-oriented steps
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