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A local college wants people with a job to come and talk to students about what it is like to work. You would like to come forward and talk to the students about your job. Write a letter to the principal of the college. In your letter, •explain what you would like to talk about • say why students would be interested in your job • suggest a possible date and time for the talk

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Dear Sir or Madam, I recently came across the advertisement
of
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 your
college
at
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 The Sun Daily paper about inviting working
professional
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professionals
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 to give talks to
college
student
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students
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. The purpose of
this
 letter is to express my
interests
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 in being the speaker. Since I left
college
last
 year, I have been working with a renowned technology company. A few topics about
workplace
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the workplace
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 that I thought would be able to catch the
students
’
interests
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. Starting from what are the common expectations at
workplace
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,
which
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I can relate to how can
students
 start to prepare for these skills in
college
.
Besides
 that, giving
students
 a glimpse of
daily
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 life of working adults is useful in helping them to set expectations of their career life. I believe the
students
 would be interested in my job too, which is
a
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 Artificial Intelligence (AI) engineer.
This
 means I get exposure to the latest technology and find ways to incorporate these technologies into various applications that can bring significant impacts to the world. On timing, I would suggest
to have
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 it on 10th October (Friday) at 3pm once the
students
 have completed their classes. Hope to hear from you soon if these suggestions are feasible. Kind Regards, James
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