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It is evident from the pie charts that only food&beverage and video games sectors faced any growth, whereas two left ones (home furnishings and electronics) had a moderate decrease.

It is evident from the charts that only food&beverage and video games sectors faced any growth,
whereas
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 left ones (home furnishings and electronics) had a moderate decrease. In 2005 the electronics and home furnishing sectors were 35% and 25% respectively, taking two leading places in the chart, but in 2010 rates for them went considerably down. As for home furnishings, its percentage hit a low point of 15%, which was only
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half
on
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 electronics' final rate in 2010, which was estimated
30
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%, going 5% down from the initial percentage. The percentage of video games and food sectors were 18% and 22%, both being about
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 of the chart, but by 2010 rates for video games had climbed up to almost
one fourth
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 of the chant, a point of 23%,
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 food&beverage section soared up a considerate 10%, hitting 32%, taking the dominant part of the chart.

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