The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided bar

chart

compares the rate of

ownig

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owning

and

rentig

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renting

family

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families

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in England

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and

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Wales between 1918 and 2011.The data

measured

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is measured

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by percentage.

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,it can be noted that the bar

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indicates that there was a dramatic

decreased

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the

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rented housing.

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, in owned

accommodation

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there was a sharply decreased. Looking in more detail,the bar

chart

illustrates that the proportion of households in rented arrangements started by approximately 79% in 1918.

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in 1939 and 1953 the number of families remained steady.From 1981 to 2001 , the ratio of rented arrangements

was

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dropped slightly,

then

it started to

rose

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up in 2011.

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1918

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there was a dramatic

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in the figure The

chart

shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 about 69%.After that ,

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1981 to 2001 , the ratio of rented housing

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dropped slightly,

then

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again it started to

rose

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in 2011.

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, between 1991 and 2001 the rate of owned housing

remaind

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remained

remains

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stabilize

about

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20%.

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goes

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down again in 2011

about

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65%. One notable point is both rented and housing

were

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staibilize

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stabilize

of the number in housing in 1939,1953 and 1991.

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