The maps below shoe an industrial area in the town of Norbition, and planned future developement of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparsions where relevant.

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immense desert

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, they lead us to the oasis with the beautiful scenes. Since I was little, the charm of

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to me a lot. Aside from English, Spanish became my

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subject because

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it is one of the most practical

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and

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the

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important status on the international stage. I admire their culture a lot,

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understand it and apply

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real life

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me feel a sense of accomplishment. As we can only attend the Spanish course in one semester at my school, I study on my own. Learning my third

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let me extend my comfort zone (Mandarin and English).

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it is similar

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English, its grammar is more difficult.

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usage, they are really hard to memorize and utilize correctly. Learning

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language doesn't let me feel exhausted.

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, I gain lots of energy from it. Through studying Spanish, I could cultivate another interest. After

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sensitive to numbers and immersed in calculations all day. As far as I

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concerned, the significance of words

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important and can not

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.

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to

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the University of California to pursue my future career, I hope to develop not only

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abilities

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my atmosphere of

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with

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interactions with diverse people that I can get at my high school. Through language studies courses, I know that many of which were

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at UC schools

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the extracurricular student groups, I think that I could understand different cultures and societies.

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, by conversing with them, I would be more studious and curious about what

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in the world, not just in books.

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is my biggest advantage.