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The maps below shoe an industrial area in the town of Norbition, and planned future developement of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparsions where relevant.

The maps below shoe an industrial area in the town of Norbition, and planned future developement of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparsions where relevant.
If the door of communication leads to
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 immense desert
then
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 the key is
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, they lead us to the oasis with the beautiful scenes. Since I was little, the charm of
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appeal
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 to me a lot. Aside from English, Spanish became my
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 subject because
of
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it is one of the most practical
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 and
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the
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 important status on the international stage. I admire their culture a lot,
to
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 understand it and apply
in
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the
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real life
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 me feel a sense of accomplishment. As we can only attend the Spanish course in one semester at my school, I study on my own. Learning my third
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 let me extend my comfort zone (Mandarin and English).
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 it is similar
with
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 English, its grammar is more difficult.
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, there are two
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verbs and
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 usage, they are really hard to memorize and utilize correctly. Learning
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 language doesn't let me feel exhausted.
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, I gain lots of energy from it. Through studying Spanish, I could cultivate another interest. After
having
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 sensitive to numbers and immersed in calculations all day. As far as I
an
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 concerned, the significance of words
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also
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 important and can not
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.
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 to
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 the University of California to pursue my future career, I hope to develop not only
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 abilities
of
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 but
also
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 my atmosphere of
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with
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 interactions with diverse people that I can get at my high school. Through language studies courses, I know that many of which were
profession
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 at UC schools
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 the extracurricular student groups, I think that I could understand different cultures and societies.
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, by conversing with them, I would be more studious and curious about what
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 in the world, not just in books.
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 is my biggest advantage.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words languages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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