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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000
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The charts compare the amount of electricity produced using five different sources of
fuel
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 in two countries in separate years.
It is clear that
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 the total production of electricity increased remarkably from 1980 to 2000 in
Australia
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 and
France
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.
Although
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 the total was similar, there were big differences in using the
power
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. Looking at the picture in more detail, we can see that coal was the main
fuel
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 used to produce 50 of the total 100
units
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 in 1980, before rising to 130 out of 180
units
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 in the year 2000 in
Australia
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.
In contrast
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, nuclear
power
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 was the most important
fuel
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 in
France
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 in 2000, which accounted for 75% of the total. When it comes to three sources of energy, it is obvious that Hydro
Power
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 made up about 25% of the total production of
fuel
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 in
Australia
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, but it decreased significantly from 5 to 2
units
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 in
France
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.
On the other hand
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, Oil remained the necessary
power
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 in
France
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, but its use dropped by 8
units
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 in
Australia
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.
Additionally
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, both countries depended on natural gas to produce electricity enormously more in 1980 than in 2000.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel, australia, france, power, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity production
  • Fuel source
  • Renewable sources
  • Non-renewable sources
  • Significant change
  • Evolved
  • Dominant source
  • Introduction of new sources
  • Reliance
  • Electricity production mix
  • Environmental implications
  • Future trend
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