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Alcohol consumption has increased dramatically over the years. Some people believe that the government should increase taxes on alcoholic beverages but others oppose to this idea and advocate personal responsibility. What do you think?

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Demand for
alohol
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alcohol
 went up sharply recently. Some people think getting
extra
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 charge for it by
government
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the government
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 can reduce
consumption
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the consumption
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 of alcohol but others think that personal responsibility should be
priority
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a priority
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 in
this
 case. In
this
essay
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 I will argue that increased taxes can be
solution
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the solution
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of
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this
 problem. Globalization is a
catch all
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 term that involves more than one country, so individuals have access
zillions
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 of
product
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products
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 or information. it is obvious that alcoholic products are
every where
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 from huge supermarkets to small businesses. And the cost varies (cheap and
luxurios
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luxurious
), it is affordable to purchase it. By adding
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 tax charge people will think twice before buying it and gradually alcohol consumption will decrease.
if
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government
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the government
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 increases taxes on
alcholic
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alcoholic
 beverages
and
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demand for
it
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them
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 will go down even though the economy of the country will suffer. But the benefits of it will exceed the downward of consumption.
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