The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010.

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The provided four pie charts discuss the changes in the workforce breakdown between 1960 and 2010 in

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A and

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essay aims to summarize the differences observed during

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period in both towns. In

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A, there was a substantial decrease in the percentage of workers employed in the manufacturing and sales sectors, amounting to almost half.

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, the services

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experienced a significant increase, approximately doubling its manpower.

On the other hand

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town

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displayed a different trend. The manufacturing

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saw a decline of 12% in its workforce,

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the services

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witnessed a rise of 15%. The sales

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town

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only experienced a slight growth of around 2%.

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, there was a notable decrease in most sectors of

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A, except for the manufacturing

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, which thrived.

Conversely

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town

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did not witness significant changes. Manufacturing remained the dominant

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town

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while

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the services

sector

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experienced similar improvements as in

town

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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, b, sector with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

163 words

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