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Some people say that the only reason for learning foreign languages is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn foreign language. Discuss the both views and give your opinion.

#people #reason #languages #travel #work #country #someone #language
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As there are two different groups of
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arguing
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 benefits resulting in learning
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language
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viewpoints
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causality
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 why travel or work in
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 country is not the main reason for
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 purpose. Learning a new
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 considered a
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prerequisite
 of international communication and it is highly valuable in school
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 all around the world. The reason behind
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 level of readiness to work in multinational workplaces in the future.
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 can ease the burden of communication barriers when it comes to international interaction among two non-native speakers which
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mostly happens in
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 those who work in an international company, more specifically in customer services,
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clients
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, some
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 aspect of learning
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language
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 of
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 who visualise other merits of learning
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, mostly claim that it is
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 important way of decreasing the
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likelihood
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 and other
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 disorders. As there has been
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 proven
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, showcasing
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in
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. To clarify, when someone absorbs new information related to the
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language
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, they
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unconsciously
 stimulate special parts of their brain that
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exactly
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 in the future.
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presume
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importance
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learning
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 is mostly about travel to other countries or international communication, think of
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 social aspects the most.
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, other
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 consider
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reprecussions
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repercussions
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serious
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