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"Prevention is better than cure." Out of a country's health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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World wide is mandatory to control
diseases
 that have increased with the passage of time. Many people think that preventive measures are much more affordable as compared to treating a syndrome. I believe that prevention could be inexpensive but not appropriate for each kind of disease. Vaccines can make a community immune to
diseases
 but not all. Studies have proven that there are certain
diseases
 that are not preventable like hepatitis C because the virus has a lot of strains
however
 it is preventable only by adopting hygienic approaches.
Such
 a kind of disorder needs a good treatment regimen because it Is impossible to invent a vaccine against each strain.
Secondly
, no doubt preventive measures are more convenient in many ways than remedies but it will be much better to have therapy for unexpecting happening
also
. Prevention is accessible to all, meanwhile, treatments need a number of diagnostic parameters to be done. Attorney the same ,time it is impossible to prevent all
diseases
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 why treating ailments is the same important as prevention. Some people may vary in opinion with different knowledge and experience but it's clear that preventive measures and treatments are both mandatory for a healthy life .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventive measures
  • health education
  • public awareness
  • proactive approach
  • unsustainable
  • economic productivity
  • healthcare system
  • vaccinations
  • curative measures
  • comprehensive healthcare
  • financial burden
  • incidence
  • preventable diseases
  • eradicating
  • controlling
  • allocated
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