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In recent times, economic growth has helped many become richer, both in developed and developing countries. However, those in developed countries are not as happy as they were in the past. Why is this? What can be learned from this? (Write 250 words.) ________

#times #growth #countries #________
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It is apparent that currently,the financial upswing has impacted many
countries
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 that have good cash flow in developed and developing
countries
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. By the way, the developed sites feel unfair once compared to the past. From my point of view, we can learn many things that are described in the following paragraph. It is truly (true)to say that right now the global economy is getting richer because developing
countries
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 support each other.
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, they have been doing agreements about trade wars with big
countries
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.
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, Southeast Asia became the ASEAN to negotiate with China or the EU about import and export. So,
this
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 leads to the Asian benefit of the prices when they order or exchange goods.
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, right now the information or data is easy to review
by
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via
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 internet platforms, the developing
countries
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 can understand more and faster than before had
the
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computer
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computers
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.
Addinally
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additionally
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), right now the parents of developing
countries
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 earn a lot of money that can support their own
cheriends
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friends
cherries
 (children),
study
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and study
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 abroad
such
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 as in the USA, The UK etc. After they
finished
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finish
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 their degree. They have English ability and a high standard at university.
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,
heading
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they head
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 back to their
countries
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 and
working
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work
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 for an international company in their hometown. They have the efficiency of working the same as the
head
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office
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 in developed
countries
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 in some positions
that
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which
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lead
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leads
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 for VP to compare the wage per hour to think twice about cost saving of some positions between the brunch in southeast
asia
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Asia
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(Asia) vs their
head
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office
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, why VP should pay salary higher than in their country once the output of working is same. In summary, it is not surprising that educated
countries
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 don’t like the developing economy nowadays.
Firstly
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, they support and group ASEAN to have more strong points to negotiate with China or the USA in terms of import and export goods.
Secondary
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,
New
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 generation
of
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from
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 Thailand, Indonesia and Vietnam
have
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has
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chance
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a chance
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studying
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to study
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 abroad
that
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apply
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they have
ability
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the ability
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of working
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to work
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same
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the same
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 as
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head
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the head
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office
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 and the rate of money per hour
lower
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is lower
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 than in developed
countries
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.
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, once
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head
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the head
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office
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 in the USA
need
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needs
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 to downsize
organization
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the organization
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, Now a day some company will eliminate their own employee
base
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based
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 on
cost
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the cost
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 per unit in developing lower than them that
why
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is why
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 people in developed
countries
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 feel hate or unfair
in
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apply
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this
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 situation.
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