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Many people argu that in order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Other think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your Opinion.

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It is obvious that education is directly connected to
countries'development
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development
 so in order to improve a country the educational system must be improved. But it has always been
debatable
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 topic how governments should arrange educational policy. Because almost all
people
 have different thoughts on
this
 topic. Especially
people
 comment on connections between
teachers
 and
students
, it is because of that these two groups play main roles in education. There are different arguments
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students
 can criticise their
teachers
 or
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 can be disrespectful. I strongly believe that
students
 are free to tell their own thoughts. On the one hand, it is true that
teachers
 can be more experienced and mature than
students
. But it doesn't mean that everything they say is true. Sometimes educated
people
 can
also
 have some mistakes or false beliefs. Or their way of thinking may be different than their
students
. In that
case
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students
 should absolutely be free to make their own comments and defend their attitudes. It helps them to be more confident when they express their feelings and thoughts.
On the other hand
, those who think it is a reason
of
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 losing respect between
teachers
 and their
students
 can be right in some aspects. Generally,
students
 in high schools are not very mature and they can use some rude words in order to express themselves or to criticise someone. Using inappropriate expressions against
teacher
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teachers
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 can cause
losing
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 respect
to
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teacher
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 and it would create chaotic classrooms.
To conclude
, not only
students
,
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 but
also
 all
people
 are free to make comments, criticise things that are not logical for them and to give their ideas. It is possible that
students
 don't like their
teachers
' ideas, but they must respect them and discuss whatever they want with
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polite language.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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