You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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The charts illustrate and compare the proportions and

time

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that people of the

two

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genders, male and female, engage in household activities. Generally speaking, it can be surmised that cooking and cleaning are the

two

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most popular

activies

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activities

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that, they

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take up the most

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across the board. Not only that, there are many differences in the distribution of housework between the

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sexes. Looking closer, women are observed to do house chores at higher rates than men.

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can be understood through the 20% gap that females outrank their

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with

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in both cooking and cleaning. Men spend less

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engaging in housework as well, with cooking and cleaning only taking up to

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60 and 40 minutes respectively compared to women's 80 and 70 minutes.

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the contrary to these figures, pet care and house repairs are proven to be outliers. The rates of the

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sexes engaging in pet care,

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the

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spent on pets, are equal with minor differences.

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that, house repairs are more popular with males in general.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Replace the words time, two with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

180 words

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