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The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate and compare the proportions and
time
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 that people of the
two
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 genders, male and female, engage in household activities. Generally speaking, it can be surmised that cooking and cleaning are the
two
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 most popular
activies
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activities
.
Along with
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 that, they
also
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 take up the most
time
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 across the board. Not only that, there are many differences in the distribution of housework between the
two
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 sexes. Looking closer, women are observed to do house chores at higher rates than men.
This
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 can be understood through the 20% gap that females outrank their
counterpart
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with
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in both cooking and cleaning. Men spend less
time
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 engaging in housework as well, with cooking and cleaning only taking up to
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60 and 40 minutes respectively compared to women's 80 and 70 minutes.
In
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 the contrary to these figures, pet care and house repairs are proven to be outliers. The rates of the
two
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 sexes engaging in pet care,
along with
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 the
time
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 spent on pets, are equal with minor differences.
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 that, house repairs are more popular with males in general.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "along with".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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