The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

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barchart

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bar chart

indicates the approximate global

illiteracy

percentages by

continents

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and by two genders for the

last

year.

Overall

, at

the

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first

glance

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it is clear that

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females

had the most

illireacy

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illiteracy

rate

in all regions with the most percentage in South

Asia

. The

least

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lowest

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rate

illiteracy

was registered in developed countries

while

the most in South

Asia

. From the chart , developed

countries

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countries'

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illiteracy

percentage was near zero following it Latin American region with

males

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at 10

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percent

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per cent

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and

females

just above 10

percent

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per cent

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. East

asia

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Asia

Asian

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males

registered less than 10

percent

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per cent

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illliteracy

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illiteracy

literacy

rate

while

females

had more than double

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the male's

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male's

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percenatage

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percentage

by 20%. In Sub-Saharan

Africa

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the rates nearly tripled compared to East

Asia

males

and

females

accordingly

32 and 48

percent

. Arab states had the second largest

illiteracy

rate

after South

Asia

with male's

percent

just under 30 and female's over 50. South

Asia

with the most

illiteracy

percentage registered for

females

just under 60 and for

males

about 35

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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and practice them with basic assistance, such as food and housing.To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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