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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.
#bar #world #illiteracy #rates #region #gender #year
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The given
barchart
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bar chart
 indicates the approximate global
illiteracy
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 percentages by
continents
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 and by two genders for the
last
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 year.
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 , at
the
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apply
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first
glance
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it is clear that
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females
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 had the most
illireacy
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illiteracy
rate
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 in all regions with the most percentage in South
Asia
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. The
least
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lowest
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rate
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 of
illiteracy
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 was registered in developed countries
while
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 the most in South
Asia
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. From the chart , developed
countries
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countries'
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illiteracy
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 percentage was near zero following it Latin American region with
males
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10
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at 10
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percent
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per cent
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 and
females
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 just above 10
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percent
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per cent
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. East
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asia
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Asia
Asian
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males
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 registered less than 10
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percent
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per cent
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illliteracy
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illiteracy
literacy
rate
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while
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females
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 had more than double
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the male's
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male's
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male
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percenatage
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percentage
 by 20%. In Sub-Saharan
Africa
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,Africa
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 the rates nearly tripled compared to East
Asia
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males
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 and
females
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accordingly
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 32 and 48
percent
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. Arab states had the second largest
illiteracy
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rate
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 after South
Asia
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 with male's
percent
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 just under 30 and female's over 50. South
Asia
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 with the most
illiteracy
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 percentage registered for
females
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 just under 60 and for
males
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 about 35
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, females, rate, asia, males, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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