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Nowadays, it is more important to plant trees in open spaces in town and cities than building houses. Do u agree or disagree ?

#plant #trees #spaces #town #cities #houses
It has been observed that nowadays the world changes fast from the point of new buildings, architectural structures for making exceeding amount of money.
Although
 some people believe that
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the
 importance of vegetation is more crucial. I firmly agree with the given statement. My inclination is elaborated in
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 paragraph and relevant examples. The foremost argument to justify my stand is that
trees
 are the source of oxygen which very vital for each human being. It is obvious that we, humans
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 oxygen and produce carbon and statistics show that the consequences of deforestation
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 to
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of
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overall
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 health of
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 and increasing
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deseases
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diseases
.
Besides
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, it is
also
 true that planting
trees
 can prevent climate change respectively. Climate change is one of the main challenges of the 21st Century,
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global warming was not
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 the agenda for global issues but now we can observe from the reports of
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Official Organizations that cutting down massive numbers of
trees
 triggers
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global
 warming.
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 the other reason to prove my point is that to follow healthy life both physically and emotionally the role of
trees
 is undeniable,
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 in the cities where pollution is a problem.
in
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 the fact that warming and its possible consequences are predictable.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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