The two pie charts shows the employment pattern in great Britain in 1992

The two pie charts shows the employment pattern in great Britain in 1992
The display pie charts describe the employment pattern in Great Britain in 1992. The below information, male and female in manual and non-manual they are craft or similar, general labourers, other manual, managerial and professional, clerical or related and other non-manual. The data is in %.
Firstly
, In the year 1992, in the Females, the highest was clerical or related with 31%, Craft or similar was 29%, General labourers was 1%, Other manual was 3%, Managerial and professional was 27%, and other non-manual was 9%.
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, In the year 1992, in the males, the highest was managerial and professional with 36%, craft or similar was 26%, general labourers were 2%, other manual was 24%, clerical or related
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other non-manual was 6%.
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, There
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great difference between
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To conclude
, the above information describes the male as well
female
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employment pattern. The data on employment
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in great
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in 1992.
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