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ome people believe that the advent of economical air travel has been beneficial by making international travel more accessible, while others argue that is has had a very negative impact. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#ome #people #advent #air #travel #impact
Nowadays many people are concerned about
abundant
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 amount of time spent on
the
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mobile
phones
.
Somebody
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 even
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 the harmful influence of mobile
phones
 to smoking and suggest prohibiting
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 usage in some places. I strongly disagree with that statement since mobile
phones
 have
became
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 an essential part of our daily life and can not be equal
with
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such
 a bad habit as smoking. First of all, smoking is harmful
for
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 people's health in
a
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long-run
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 and it
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proved
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 by many health organisations. Nicotine is poisonous
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 humans' lungs and heart
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 and can lead to many dangerous diseases
such
 as cancer. The usage of mobile phone obviously affect humans' vision,
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 it can not be compared to
toxicity
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 of
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nicotine.
Moreover
, we are living in the century of digitalisation and all our life related to our mobile
phones
. Communication, maps, wallet, work - all these things can be reached in one thing called 'cell phone'. Banning
such
 gadgets will probably cause complexity in our daily lives since we are already
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 used to an easy lifestyle where all necessary things are on our
phones
.
Last
, but not least, smoking is known as a bad habit, but not everybody smokes,
while
 mobile
phones
 are used by almost every person on the earth.
Firstly
, it is difficult to conduct
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 legally, so every person will be able to follow the
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law
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.
Furthermore
, it will bring problems
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 every business in the world since people would not understand how to
fastly
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 adapt to
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new conditions without mobile
phones
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • sustainable travel
  • carbon footprint
  • mass tourism
  • cultural exchange
  • economic boost
  • budget airlines
  • ecological repercussions
  • noise pollution
  • cultural commodification
  • democratization of travel
  • heritage conservation
  • climate change
  • tourist influx
  • environmental stewardship
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