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The graph below shows the daily consumption of three spreads per person from 1981 to 2007 in a country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided line graph illustrates the daily intake of three distinct types of spread by an individual per day in a single country over the
period
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 from 1981-2007.
Initially
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, margarine and
butter
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 were the only available options at the start of the
period
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.
Nevertheless
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, by the end of the
period
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, the range was expanded with low fat and reduced spreads.
To begin
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, slightly above 140
grams
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 of
butter
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 were consumed in 1981,
while
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 just above 100
grams
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 of margarine were used by individuals in the same year.
Accordingly
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,
butter
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 was the most popular product at the start of the
period
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. Surprisingly, even
butter
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 consumption leapt to 160
grams
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 per day in 1986,
then
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 it dramatically decreased to approximately 65
grams
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 in 1996. Eventually, the daily intake of
butter
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 was just above 45
at the end
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 of the
period
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.
On the other hand
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, slightly under 100
grams
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 of margarine was used per person in 1981.
This
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 graph fluctuated to 80 and
then
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 rose back to 100 in 1986 and 1991, respectively. The product of low fat and reduced spread was introduced in 1996 and it gained a sudden popularity to 80
grams
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 in 2001. Ultimately, it was the most popular product among the other two by the end of 2007, at approximately 86.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, butter, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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