The line graphs lower depicts the changing of population in the period from 1940 to 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.

The line graphs lower depicts the changing of population in the period from 1940 to 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.
The curve lower depicts the changing of
population
in the period from 1940 to 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon. In 1940,
Columbia
had the lowest
population
of the three territories, which consisted
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approximately 25 000.
This
compared with 75 000
inhabitans
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inhabitants
of Washington was triple what it
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been in
Columbia
,
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year.
Also
, the graph showed a third Yamhill
county
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,
where
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occupied
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30 000
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30,000
citizens in 1940. In the years 1940-1970, there was
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rise in the number of Yamhill`s residents from 30 000 to 45 000,
similarly
, there has been
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increase in the
population
of
Columbia
at around 50%.
By contrast
, Washington`s demography climbed sharply from
75 000
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75,000
to more than
120 000
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120,000
occupants between 1940 and 1970. By 2000, for the
population
of
Columbia
and Yamhill counties trend was still upward, and
then
there was a sharp climb for both of them.
Columbia
`s
population
increased considerably from
45 000
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45,000
to
90 000
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90,000
.
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