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The line graphs lower depicts the changing of population in the period from 1940 to 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.

The line graphs lower depicts the changing of population in the period from 1940 to 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.
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The curve lower depicts the changing of
population
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 in the period from 1940 to 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon. In 1940,
Columbia
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 had the lowest
population
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 of the three territories, which consisted
by
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 approximately 25 000.
This
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 compared with 75 000
inhabitans
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inhabitants
 of Washington was triple what it
has
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 been in
Columbia
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,
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in, same
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same
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the same
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 year.
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, the graph showed a third Yamhill
county
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,
where
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has
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occupied
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30 000
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30,000
 citizens in 1940. In the years 1940-1970, there was
steady
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a steady
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 rise in the number of Yamhill`s residents from 30 000 to 45 000,
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, there has been
gradual
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a gradual
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 increase in the
population
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 of
Columbia
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 at around 50%.
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, Washington`s demography climbed sharply from
75 000
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75,000
 to more than
120 000
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120,000
 occupants between 1940 and 1970. By 2000, for the
population
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 of
Columbia
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 and Yamhill counties trend was still upward, and
then
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 there was a sharp climb for both of them.
Columbia
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`s
population
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 increased considerably from
45 000
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45,000
 to
90 000
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90,000
.
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