The chart below present information about electricity generated using renewable and non- renewable energy in the united staes in 2009 and 2019.

The chart below present information about electricity generated using renewable and non- renewable energy in the united staes in 2009 and 2019.
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the information about electricity in The United States by using renewable and non-renewable energy in the year
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2009 and 2019. Overview, renewable
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in the year 2009 to 2019 'coal' has been used highly in energy
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renewable electricity produced by
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energy
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used
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57
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compared to 2019 it
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, renewable are slightly increased
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in 2019 consists of 2019 it
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, nuclear
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reached 809
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in 2019 and natural gas in 2019
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921
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in 2019, it
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raised
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up to 1582
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kWh
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grewed
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1756
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in 2019it downed
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966
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,renewable energy
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in solar supply in 2009
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1
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compared to 2019 it soared
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73
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94
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in 2009 and it suddenly climbed to 300
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,geothermal remains constant in both two decades.
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,plant and animal matter significantly surged
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58
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in 2019.
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consists of 2009 it leapt to 41
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, hydroelectric produces electricity roughly equal in both two decades, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, upto, kwh with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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