Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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These days, applicants looking for a job frequently are assessed by their responses to personal questions.

Although

some people have

this

view that

this

kind of

information

is insufficient and useless, I partly believe that

this

type of

information

is important and effective and more

information

is required.

To begin

, a company is successful when skilled workers are hired. Knowing about an employee's interests and how they spend their free time does not make it clear whether they are eligible for a job or not.

For instance

, if a company is looking for someone to deal with a foreign client, having

information

about an applicant who is single and enthusiastic about playing golf, is not enough.

As a result

this

kind of data is not sufficient and effective.

However

, I believe that in order to hire someone, employers should know about their personal data.

Firstly

, getting to know better an applicant, shows a lot about their behaviour.

For Example

, if they do sports activities on a daily basis, it illustrates that they live healthily, and having an employee in normal conditions will help the company develop faster.

In addition

, it is crucial to hire employees who are psychologically and mentally healthy.

Furthermore

, if they are able to answer these simple and personal questions confidently, it shows that they are conscientious and straightforward and can express themselves.

To sum up

however

, some people think that asking for personal data is quite enough, From my point of view, asking questions and having

information

about their skills and talents which are related to the job they have applied for is required.

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task response

Ensure that all points discussed directly relate to the topic and question prompt. Address both views and provide a clear opinion while maintaining focus on the topic.

coherence and cohesion

The introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant. Use transition words and phrases more consistently to improve coherence and flow.

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11Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

269 words

7.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

job application
personal information
hobbies and interests
marital status
relevant
useful
privacy
assessing candidates
qualifications
experience

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