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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a lette to this friend. In your letter Say why he/she would not enjoy college explain why getting a good job is a good idea for him/her suggest types job that would be suitable for him/her

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Dear Stan, How are you? I hope you are doing great. I'm happy that you turned to me for guidance. As long as I know pretty well, I can say for sure that
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 won't be your cup of tea. During our school years, you did not like studying at all. Studying
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 campus will be twenty times harder,
not to mention
 that you won't have free time to spend on your hobbies (that
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 know you value). It does sound weird that I'm recommending seeking employment, but in your case, a job will benefit you greatly. I think no one can deny that you are a skilled artist and
that is
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.
Instead
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 education that you can get online, you can easily start working and learn new skills along the way
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 making money. If I were you (and sometimes I wish!), I would seek
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employment in a Web Design position. It doesn't require a lot of
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, but it thrives on creativity and imagination.
Not to mention
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 skills are
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demand in the market right now.
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 can expect a fine salary once you start but the more creative you are the bigger your paycheck will be. Once you pick up your mind, please let me know what path will you take, and don’t forget I'm always here to support you. Love, Mike
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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