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The diagram below shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The diagram below shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)
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The diagram illustrates the
water
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 cycle, a continuous process involving the movement of
water
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 through various stages on, above, and below the Earth’s surface. The cycle begins with the evaporation process mostly originates from the ocean’s
water
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due to
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 the heat of the sun. As
timed
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passed
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passes
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 the
water
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vapor
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vapour
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 rises into the atmosphere, where it cools and condenses to form clouds.
Hence
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,
water
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vapor
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 becomes precipitation,
such
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 as rain or snow, which falls back to the Earth’s surface.
In
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As
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 a result of
raining
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rain
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 or snowing, some of it
was
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is
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 resorbed by
absorbable
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an absorbable
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 soil layer and becomes groundwater, which can flow towards the ocean. There is a risk of saltwater penetration when groundwater meets the ocean.
In the
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 rest of
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water
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the water
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 accumulates in
river
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rivers
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,
bay
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bays
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 or lakes.
Overall
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, the
water
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 cycle is a continuous and self-sustaining process, The ocean plays
major
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a major
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 role
to ensure
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in ensuring
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 a balance in
water
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 distribution through natural mechanisms.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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