The diagram below shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The diagram below shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.   Write at least 150 words.   (20 mins.)
The picture diagram shows the continuous movement of the
water
cycle in
the
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apply
show examples
nature, from the ocean to above and below the
surface
of the earth.
Firstly
, about 80% of
water
comes from ocean. It
vapors
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vapours
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to
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into
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the air by the heat of the sun and
then
becomes
water
vapor
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vapour
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.
Then
the
water
condenses and forms
the
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a
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cloud above the
earth
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earth's
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surface
.
Then
, the cloud formation leads to precipitation. The
rain
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rainwater
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water
is collected in lakes on the
earth
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earth's
show examples
surface
. Another source of the
water
is from snow on the top of the mountain. The gravity and the
surface
runoff make the
water
goes
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go
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through the ground and
becomes
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become
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ground
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groundwater
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water
below the
surface
called
impervious
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the impervious
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layer.
Lastly
, the
ground
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groundwater
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water
runs through the entrance of the ocean again at the
salt
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saltwater
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water
intrusion where the salt
water
meets the fresh
water
,
results
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resulting
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in
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at
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the beginning of the next
water
cycle.
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