you and your family have just come back from a holiday staying in a rented apartment overlooking the sea. The apartment was very unsatisfactory. Write a letter of complaint to the manager of the agency from which you rented the apartment. In your letter, – give details of the things that were unsatisfactory – explain the reactions of the members of your family – ask the manager what he/she is going to do about the situation

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the new
apartment
which I rented from your good office. I am Jennifer Ramos, the person who rented
apartment
105 in the Park Avenue residential complex
in
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King's Beach Road. I
had
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been on holiday in Spain for the
last
three months with my family. I booked an
apartment
though
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your agency.
While
I was booking the room, I confirmed that the
apartment
had a sea view, but ,
unfortunately
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when I arrived at the
apartment
, the view of the sea was blocked by another building.
Moreover
, some of the furniture is broken and my wife is annoyed by that. The air conditioner in the kid's bedroom is not functioning properly, so my kids felt exhausted
last
night .
Therefore
, I am requesting you to change my
apartment
as soon as possible. The property is completely different from the pictures we received. Let me know if you have any other property with a sea view. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jennifer Ramos
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