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These days many people leave their country to work abroad and take their families with them. Do you think adavantages of this outweigh the disadvantages in terms of family development.

Nowadays it
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an
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 trend to
work
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 abroad and take their families with them. As every coin
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have
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 two sides in
same
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the same
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 ways
this
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have
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to
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two
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side
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 advantage
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disadvantage
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a disadvantage
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. In my opinion,
this
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have
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 more advantages.
Firstly
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, As many
people
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 leave their
country
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 to
work
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 abroad
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have
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has
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 so many
advanatges
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advantages
. As a
person
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 will go to another nation that he or she will
expericence
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experience
 a lot. The
person
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 will develop in all ways. When
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person
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a person
the person
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will
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apply
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reture
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returns
back
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apply
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then
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 it will
benefits
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benefit
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 its own
country
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 in many ways.
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, if
a women
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a woman
women
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will go
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goes
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in
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to
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 another
country
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 for
work
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then
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 she will take her family
as well as
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 children
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then
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the
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 children will learn new things and
family
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the family
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 will
also
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 get more and more knowledge.
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,
this
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have
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has
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 many
benfits
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benefits
 for both the nation and
person
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as well as
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 family.
Secondly
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,
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However
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however
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, there are even
disadavantage
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disadvantage
disadvantages
 like older
people
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 in
there
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their
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family
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families
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have
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 to face more and more
problem
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problems
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in
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with
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 food and in
a
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the
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 language
also
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. The
country
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 in which
there
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they
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 are
leaving
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living
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 will face problems like sending good
people
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 outside.
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, if a man will
leav
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leave
 their
country
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 to
work
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 in another nation
then
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 he will take
he
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the
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 kids with them and
there
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their
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 kids will face
problem
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problems
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 in making new friends and
adoting
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adopting
 in
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the enverinment
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enverinment
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environment
.
Thus
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, a
person
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 should think before going
to
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apply
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abroad.
Thirdly
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,
Government
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the Government
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 should increase
opporunties
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opportunities
 for
people
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 who are
planing
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planning
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 to go
abroads
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abroad
.
To conclude
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,
people
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 leaving their
country
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 to
work
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 abroad and take their families with them
have
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 equal
adavantages
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advantages
as well as
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disadvanatge
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disadvantage
disadvantages
. In my opinion,
this
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have
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has
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 more
advanatges
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advantages
.

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