The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the wide range of post-school qualifications in Australia and the share of males and females who held them in 1999.
Overall
, we can see that the
percentage
of female in the undergraduate
diploma
and bachelor's degree were more than male,
while
in other categories the
percentage
of male were more than female. In 1999, the
percentage
of
men
in the skilled vocational
diploma
was 9 times more than
women
, 90% and 10% respectively.
However
, the
percentage
of
women
in
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the
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undergraduate
diploma
was more than
men
by 35%, 70% and 35% respectively. In the bachelor's
degree
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the proportion of
women
and
men
was quite similar about 45% and 50%. In the fourth category, the postgraduate
diploma
, 30% of
women
had the proportion,
whereas
this
number for
men
was about 70%. In the master's degree,
women
compared with
men
had the
least
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share about 40%,
while
men
had 60%.
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