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Percentage of water used for differenth purposes in six areas of the world

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The Charts Describes the percentage of Water consumed for various purpose in six different areas of the world. In that ,case consumption for agriculture is the highest at around 88% in central Asia.Meanwhile,Europe plays a vital role in the Industrial sector ,but in the domestic
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 than others. Agriculture is the most essential for
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human survival.Based on the chats.Central Asia, Southeast
asia
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Asia
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 are the major
producer
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 of Paddy,Wheat,and Crops etc
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Africa rising in agriculture among other countries than the
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 decade.
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 high growth in Plants and
Crops
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 Asian countries are likely to engage in exports,
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 helps an economy to the next level across the world.
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 the other ,hand Europe shooting up against any other countries in the Industrial sector.
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 there
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 more job
oppertutinities
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opportunities
 for young people,As long as North America opened the door for
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 generation.Nowadays people
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concernt
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concerned
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the domestic
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life style
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lifestyle
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it
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 leads
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the
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 lesser intake of water,That was the great part.
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