some people feel that good health is very important to every people, so medical service should not be run by profit making companies. Do the advantages of private health care outweigh the disadvantages

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is always one of the most critical aspects of

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life.

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, it is thought by a number of people that

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provision should not be operated by

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sector. Personally, I disagree with that opinion and think that the benefits of private

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do outweigh the drawbacks. On the one hand, there are certain disadvantages that

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hospitals bring about regarding high treatment costs

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and potential ethical and legal corruption. In terms of the former, since

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institutions owned privately have little dependence on the national budget, their incomes come mostly from

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’ charges.

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would increase the costs of medical treatment, and make

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less accessible for low-wage people or even

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class. Turning to the latter, private

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is somewhat profit-oriented so doctors may treat their

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unethically and even illegally to earn more money. Some of the common ways are requiring more medical tests than necessary, or prescribing expensive medicines

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of cheaper and quality substitutes. Despite the aforementioned downside, there are numerous positives that private

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brings for

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, medical staff and governments.

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since private medical establishments are not limited by

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budget, there is more access to advanced treatment and modern technology.

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have greater choices in medical services.

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doctors and other medical staff would be in more favourable working conditions with less pressure of too many

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and higher salaries

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but not least,

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services have the difficulty of rising demand but limited willingness to increase taxes to pay for it. The private sector could fill

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gap by operating independently from the national budget, reducing public spending on

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and earning more taxes for governments from profit-making medical firms. In conclusion, private

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introduces both pros and cons.

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, I am convinced that the advantages are more essential than the disadvantages regarding benefits for

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, medical employees and national authorities.