Some people believe that schools should focus on academic subjects only, while others think that schools should also provide classes on life skills, such as communication and teamwork. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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, school has been someone’s first learning experience to grow
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themselves
academically and behaviorally. To one extreme, people expect
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to focus in education
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.
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, another group think that social skills must be taken seriously in classes as well. I think both views have good points,
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, I partially agree with some terms. The expectation that
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institution, as its name, must care about the subjects thoroughly is valid for
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who take advanced professional majors or graduate studies like
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or doctoral
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. By the
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someone
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point in their life, they must have passed their life-skill development timeline.
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, someone is eligible to pursue their
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degree at 21 years old the soonest. At
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level, adult
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prefer to focus on
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so they can finish their academic
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faster
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the workforce. Even if they want to learn about social
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, it must not
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that is
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mandatory from the
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but more a self-driven attempt.
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, the belief that
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should
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teach life-survival skills is more relatable for toddler to teenage
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must dedicate
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to discipline their
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through rules and nurture lifetime values like leadership, integrity, and
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during
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developing
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as they will capture the lessons in their core memories. I was lucky enough to go to a Christian
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where the teachers passionately devote their
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our characters and qualities. In hindsight, I believe there are two types of life-skill
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. Before a student reaches 18 years old,
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must make efforts to teach life-skill qualities through classes.
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, after they reach their adult phase,
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should be able to self-learn the skills by proactively
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communities, clubs, or committees.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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