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The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2019.

The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2019.
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The bar graph
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shows
 how many male and female students study six
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different
science related
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subjects
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 at a university in London. It is measured in individual
resarch
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research
student
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students
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 studying each
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. We can see that biology and
medicine
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 had the largest amount of students out of all the different courses. Veterinary
medicine
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 had the lowest number of students from all the
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different
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. There
where
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 more men studying the six
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 in comparison to women. When we look more closely at the graph we can see that the three
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subjects
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 Physics, biology and
medicine
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 the most popular
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 the men,
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 the women preferred
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the
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 Biology,
medicine
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 and veterinary
medicine
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. The two most popular
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where
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were
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 both
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 that contain a lot of
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 that have to
bememorized
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 other
subjects
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 contain. The biggest
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difference
 in men and women taking a
subject
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 can be seen in the
subject
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 physics.
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