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The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on fuel.

The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on fuel.
#information #people #states #kingdom #fuel
The given line graph
provide
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the
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apply
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information
of
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fuel
 consumption in two particular countries, The USA and The United Kingdom, which
divided
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 into three main categories : poorest, middle-income and richest. The units
is
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 presented as
percent
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per cent
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 of income
Overall
,
this
 is
an
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evident that the trend depicts two different
trend
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. in the USA, more upper economy class less used
fuel
,
while
 in the UK, they dominantly used
this
 energy source. The large proportion of
fuel
was
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consumed by the paupers in the USA, stood at around 4% of their income before reaching its peak at slightly over 5% ,
however
, it
is
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experienced
gradual
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 dropped among middle-class residents at
range
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a range
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 between 5% and 4%. The decrease continued in rich-class which hit the bottom at slightly over 2% of their salary. Regarding the second area, The United Kingdom, the poor population use
fewer
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fuel
 than the rich one, just below 1% of their income,
while
 the higher class reach its peak at above 3%
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