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Some people want to be able to contact their employees at all times, even on holidays. Does this development has more advantages than disadvantages?

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It is certainly true that some managers want to be able to contact their
employees
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 at any time, even on holidays.
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 accepting that, I believe that contacting workers
out
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 of office hours is more likely to have negative outcomes. On the one hand, there are several benefits of keeping in touch with staff at any time in
week
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a week
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. A common advantage is that staff members can update the information of
company
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the company
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. Another positive aspect
can be
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 that the working people can meet their
deadline
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 easily because emails of managers look like reminders.
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,
employees
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 may forget
date
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the date
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 to finish work because they usually have
own
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their own
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 business
in
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at
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 the weekend.
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, an email
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management
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the management
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 committee will be a fantastic end for them.
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, these benefits can be outweighed by the drawbacks. One obvious disadvantage is that the
employees
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 will feel
stressful
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 if they always receive too many emails, even on holidays.
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the workers need to have privacy time for their families or themselves to relax after a long working day.
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, contacting during non-working hours certainly
put
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 pressure on
employees
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 as managers’ announcements will make them
to
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think of working at all times.
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, bringing too much information during
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the
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 week can cause confusion for workers.
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, it seems that there is no planning in working for both leaders and staff. In conclusion, it seems that the potential dangers of
contacting
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contracting
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 personnel during weekends or even holidays are more harmful than the possible benefits
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