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In many countries people are consuming more sugar-based drinks than before. Why is this happening and what could be done to reduce the sugary drink consumption. ( Prob Sol)

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In today’s world, the demand for aerated
drinks
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 has increased drastically. Youngsters are nowadays adopting more for fast-food
as well as
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 energy
drinks
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 that are easily available. There are many health issues that arise from these
drinks
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.
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, as
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technology has improved, it has
also
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 increased the demand for
drinks
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 that are releasing energy at a faster pace within the body. These aerated
drinks
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, are causing obesity in youngsters and are affecting the
overall
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well-beings
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well-being
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 of individuals. The famous aerated drink
coca cola
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coca-cola
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 is now launching new flavours
in
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that are encouraging
the
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customers to buy more of their product.
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,
according to
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 a recent survey conducted at The Little Flower High School , the vending machines for aerated
drinks
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 needed to be re-filled at frequent intervals, resulting in obesity among teenagers.
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, these problems can be addressed if youngsters and individuals are given information about the
ill-effect
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effects
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 of these
drinks
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. The parents shall read the nutrient contents before giving these
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 to the children. Schools and offices should install fresh juice vending machines that enable them to refuel when tired. These juices are freshly made and do not hold any conservatives and have no side effects as well.
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, the HealthFly organization in Bombay has replaced vending machines with fresh juice counters that
enables
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 the employees to consume healthy
drinks
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 at work.
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, there needs to a be fine balance in the amount of sugary
drinks
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 that an individual consumes throughout the day. Consuming sugar
drinks
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 on a regular basis results in unhealthy lifestyles and health issues.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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