Write about the following topic: Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, some products are being sold by famous brands and
companies
. This
could because
of the Add a missing verb
be because
power
of advertisemet
on Correct your spelling
advertising
the
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apply
peoples'
decisions which would force them to purchase some Change noun form
people's
goods
, which are unnecessary for them in the
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apply
society
. I completly argree
with Correct your spelling
completely agree
this
statements
and I think we live in a community, Fix the agreement mistake
statement
which
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in which
every one
just Replace the word
everyone
think
about their benefits.
Huge businesses and big Change the verb form
thinks
companies
invest a big
amount of their budget on advertisement, so Correct word choice
large
their
biggest parts of their sales Change the word
the
is
because of that. Change the verb form
are
Firstly
, we see numerous billboards whole of our city, in some public places and even high ways
, which they advertise Correct your spelling
highways
goods
and facilities. This
show
the Change the verb form
shows
power
of advertising to make our minds busy with that
products. In order to do that, the rate of sales would be grown in that specific Correct determiner usage
those
companies
. Fix the agreement mistake
company
Secondly
, adolescents and students are looking for new trend
and they would be affected by their Fix the agreement mistake
trends
favorite
celebrities sooner Change the spelling
favourite
that
adults. Providing that they see an advertisement Correct word choice
than
between
their Change preposition
on
favorite
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favourite
TV-show
or on their social media page, which Correct your spelling
TV show
on
that their beloved actor,actress or football player advertises a new video game or even a piece of Change preposition
apply
clothes
, they Wrong verb form
clothing
completly
affect by that and they would ask their parent to provide that product, even if it is not crucial.
Correct your spelling
completely
Furthermore
, In my opinion, the governments should fund some companies
' advertisements which their goods
are new for both society
and individuals. Because of the power
of global and western
businesses, some local start-ups which they try their best to implement fashionable and modern Capitalize word
Western
product
would Fix the agreement mistake
products
be
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apply
disappeard
. Correct your spelling
disappear
For instance
, we have numerous start-ups run by new-graduated university students and they have variety
of products Add an article
a variety
such
as new technologies, electronical
gadgets or even new electrical Correct your spelling
electronic
pices
for home Correct your spelling
pieces
prices
enchores
. If the government does not Correct your spelling
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encores
assisst
them Correct your spelling
assist
to introduce
their Change preposition
in introducing
goods
, they might loose
their motivation, which Replace the word
lose
in
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is
unefficient
for both Correct your spelling
inefficient
society
and local communities.
In conclusion, because of the advertisement
Replace the word
advertising
power
of some big and global companies
, the new start-ups would be damaged in the
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apply
society
and people might purchase some facilities which they do not play an impotant
role in their lives Correct your spelling
important
as well as
society
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