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The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts information about the
students
 divided into genders and learning science
subjects
such
 as physics, astronomy, geology,
biology
,
medicine
 and veterinary
medicine
 at UK university in 2009. At the first glance, the quantity of men studying science is higher in every aspect except the veterinary
medicine
 at university. Generally, the females choose
subjects
such
 as
biology
,
medicine
, veterinary
medicine
 more than other
subjects
.
Biology
 has the highest proportion of the males studying the subject (250
students
) and another significant part of men choose to learn the physics (220). And respectively 200 pupils at the
medicine
,
while
 at veterinary
medicine
 consist only of 75 learners.
Students
 that were studying astronomy and geology were equal and consisted 150. On other hand, many women do not prefer to study the
subjects
such
 as: physics, astronomy and geology, and number of the female-learners are respectively: 40, 60 and 70.
However
, compared to boys they select to study
biology
 and
medicine
 (200 and 170
students
according to
 chart). And number of the women picking veterinary
medicine
 is higher (110
students
) than the man part.
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