The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009.

summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart depicts information about the
students
divided into genders and learning science
subjects
such
as physics, astronomy, geology,
biology
,
medicine
and veterinary
medicine
at UK university in 2009. At the first glance, the quantity of men studying science is higher in every aspect except the veterinary
medicine
at university. Generally, the females choose
subjects
such
as
biology
,
medicine
, veterinary
medicine
more than other
subjects
.
Biology
has the highest proportion of the males studying the subject (250
students
) and another significant part of men choose to learn the physics (220). And respectively 200 pupils at the
medicine
,
while
at veterinary
medicine
consist only of 75 learners.
Students
that were studying astronomy and geology were equal and consisted 150. On other hand, many women do not prefer to study the
subjects
such
as: physics, astronomy and geology, and number of the female-learners are respectively: 40, 60 and 70.
However
, compared to boys they select to study
biology
and
medicine
(200 and 170
students
according to
chart). And number of the women picking veterinary
medicine
is higher (110
students
) than the man part.
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