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The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts information about the
students
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 divided into genders and learning science
subjects
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such
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 as physics, astronomy, geology,
biology
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,
medicine
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 and veterinary
medicine
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 at UK university in 2009. At the first glance, the quantity of men studying science is higher in every aspect except the veterinary
medicine
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 at university. Generally, the females choose
subjects
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such
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 as
biology
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,
medicine
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, veterinary
medicine
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 more than other
subjects
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.
Biology
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 has the highest proportion of the males studying the subject (250
students
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) and another significant part of men choose to learn the physics (220). And respectively 200 pupils at the
medicine
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,
while
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 at veterinary
medicine
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 consist only of 75 learners.
Students
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 that were studying astronomy and geology were equal and consisted 150. On other hand, many women do not prefer to study the
subjects
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such
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 as: physics, astronomy and geology, and number of the female-learners are respectively: 40, 60 and 70.
However
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, compared to boys they select to study
biology
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 and
medicine
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 (200 and 170
students
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according to
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 chart). And number of the women picking veterinary
medicine
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 is higher (110
students
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) than the man part.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, subjects, biology, medicine with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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