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The graph below shows te percentage change in the number of international sudents graduating from universities in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.

The graph below shows te percentage change in the number of international sudents graduating from universities in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.
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The graph illustrates the changes in the percentage of international students graduating from various universities in Canadian regions between 2001 and 2006.
Overall
, the number of graduated students from all the provinces listed shows that the highest percentage was in 2006, except for Alberto
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 indicates an opposite trend. Both in 2001 and 2006 New Brunswick
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experienced
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 larger number of international graduates which were around 7% and about 11% respectively. There was a significant increase in British Columbia provinces in 2006 where the percentage rose up
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 more than twice of 2001 which was approximately 6%. That was followed by Nova Scotia
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 reached around 10% in 2006.
Additionally
, Manitoba, Newfoundland and Labrador, Ontario, and Quebec shared similar escalations which had increased roughly less than 5% in 2006 from 2001.
However
, the number of international graduates in Alberta in 2001 was higher than
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 which was almost 6% in 2001
while
 more than 4% in 2006.
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