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The table below shows the estimated literacy rates by region and gender for 2000-2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the estimated literacy rates by region and gender for 2000-2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the bar chart illustrates the proportion of the estimated literacy by region and gender for 4 years, starting in 2000
overall
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 the percentage of total in Europe was the highest with 93.6%
while
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 in Africa was the lowest with only 62.5%
to begin
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 there was 87.2% male and 77.3% female literacy worldwide,
while
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 the rate in America was 94.1% and 93.2%. Africa accounted for 71.6% of males and 53.9% of females studied,
while
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 Asia made up a significantly higher fraction of 85.9% of males and 72.5% of females. And
finally
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, the percentage of Oceania were 94.2% male and 92.7% female, which was very close to Europe when it had 99.2% males and 98.5% female estimated literacy

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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