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Some people say that educational success depends most of the time on having a good teacher. Other say that attitude of students also matters? Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #success #time #teacher #attitude #students #matters
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highly
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 debated issue
that
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whether
children
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high-score
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 depends on the credibility of
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a teacher
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 or
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wholly depends on
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 perception to achieve it. I believe that academic achievement depends on
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 mindset. On the one hand, people opine that great mentors are the true inspiration for
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 make the customized learning schedule of students but only
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constructive feedback to pupils to overcome their obstacles.
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,
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 challenging environment among the pupils and
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 utmost efforts will be
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 by them to achieve
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high performance.
For example
, the peer review activity is commonly practised by the teachers in
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the classroom
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 to instil the feeling of self-improvement.
On the other hand
, if the
student
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students
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donot
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do not
 showcase their ambition to excel in educational
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platforms
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, teachers all
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excessive
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 efforts would be in vain.
Moreover
, if the child has an aptitude for sports and he is compelled to excel in studies against his choice, the results will be
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deteriorated
.
Therefore
,
student
's motivation and
hardwork
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hard work
 are
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crucial factors of
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academic success.
To sum up
,
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 reiterate that
although
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mentors
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 no one can achieve
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fruitful results, the individual sense of responsibility is the foremost necessity to achieve high band
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 at
institutional
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the institutional
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 level.
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