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Some people think governments should focus the spending only on public services rather than wasting money on arts (music, painting, etc.). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
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 day and age, guests still want to find their own
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 and resorts in their thoughts.
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 the reason for mixed opinions on the issue of
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 more and more, one of which is that the Government should use
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money
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 for
community
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 service development
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 of spending on turmeric activities. technique. From my point of view, I completely object to
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, spending on
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services
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 will help the
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 to develop more but if governments only spend
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 on public
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 will cause many disadvantages. Specifically, the purpose of
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 when deciding to stop in a new
country
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 is to explore and experience new things.
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, public
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 are very popular in the world, and almost all developing countries have
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 for the
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. So
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 will only spend
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 on new and stimulating things
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 of spending
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 just to experience things that are too familiar to them.
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, each place has its own characteristics to attract
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 to trade in gratitude items.
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, the Hue royal court will have old dresses and a cheo singing repertoire, ...
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, spending
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 to do diverse and rich art forms or restoration of ancient architectural works will be more
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convenient convenient
 more than spending
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 on
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 ads.
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,
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 not only attracts people in the
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 but
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 attracts
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 abroad.
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, the contribution of funding for art development will be much lower than spending on
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 promotion.
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, if the government focuses on developing
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services
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, it will lose the diversity of
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.
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, the ancient architectural works that are not restored will make their quality go down and not keep the pristine beauty that it has ever had. So graduate students or
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 wishing to visit will not be able to enjoy the original beauty of the architecture, thereby losing the excitement in the travel experience of travel. passenger.
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 to communication campaigns to promote
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, the stories of passengers' experiences are
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 noticed more than ever. Assuming that a happy trip is posted by a blogger that will collect a large number of people interacting, the image of the tourist place will become incomplete for those who plan to go.
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. More importantly, the number of
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 will decrease and the economy will not increase if no passengers visit.
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, the focus on developing
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services
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 or the
tourism
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 industry is the same, so if the government only focuses on developing the most tours will cause imbalance and negative effects on that
country
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.

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