Some people say that what children watch on TV influences their behaviour while others say the amount of time children spend watching TV influences their behavious. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the modern era of gadgets, A
television
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is a common item in every household. It is a common topic of debate that what programme
children
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watch
affect
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affects
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their
behaviour
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or it is the time spent watching.
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essay will discuss both views with my opinion. These days,
children
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are more than capable of turning on the
television
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without adult supervision, giving them access to
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programs which are not meant for
children
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's eyes
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, they can misinterpret the information they have gained.
For instance
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- a
child
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with full control of the T.V. watches extreme violence like murder movies that can affect the viewpoint of
juvenile's
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the juvenile's
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mind, making violence normal for him.
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, making him violent or becoming a bully among his peers. In my opinion, it is rarely the case that a
child
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would become violent just because he watched a movie, it might be a short-term issue but with time and
guidance
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it could be controlled without long-term
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behaviour
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behavioural
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effects.
To begin
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with, parents who are often busy let their offspring watch
television
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for hours.
Due to
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this
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children
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often do not pay attention to their studies and neglect their homework which can result in bad grades and careless
behaviour
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from
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child
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children
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.
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, young ones often ignore playing outside with their friends as they are
addicted
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so addicted
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to
television
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programs that they forget about the real world. All
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can lead to a serious
behaviour
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problem and can hinder the
overall
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growth of the
child
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. In my point of view, watching TV for too long can pose major problems as
children
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have problems communicating effectively with their parents and friends because
reel
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real
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life and real life are two different worlds. To which a
child
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can not differentiate.
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, it can seen clearly that
children
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sometimes get influenced by what they see on TV but can be controlled with the right guidance,
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, watching
television
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can disturb a
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child
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child's
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viewpoint.
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, both equally affect a
child
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's
behaviour
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and growth.
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